PLOT!
So, I've come up with a small plot for Polly. Polly is no longer the name of your character, but rather the planet on which this creature lives. Polly was a very nice planet, until IDBC came along. IDBC (Interplanetary Delivery of Boxes Company (The universe's version of UPS)) tried to set up a factory on planet Polly, because of a lack of any major vegetation. Unfortunately, IDBC's company completely ruined Polly, and they left, leaving all of their stuff behind to rot, because Polly's soil easily gave away to their tunnel boring machines to make box delivery pipes (hence the flying boxes :D). This resulted in several holes in the ground. Then, you're moving in with your uncle and your auntie in Bel-Air!Now this is the story all about howMy life got flipped, turned upside downAnd Id like to take a minute just sit right thereIll tell you how I became the prince of a town called bel-airIn west philadelfia born and raisedOn the playground where I spent most of my daysChilling out, maxing, relaxing all coolAnd all shooting some b-ball outside of the schoolWhen a couple of guys said were up in no goodStarted making trouble in my neighbourhoodI got in one little fight and my mom got scaredAnd said youre moving with your aunte and uncle in bel-airI begged and pleaded with her the other dayBut she packed my suitcase and sent me on my wayShe gave me a kissin and she gave me my ticketI put my walkman on and said I might aswell kick itFirst class, yo this is bad,Drinking orange juice out of a champagne glassIs this what the people of bel-air livin like,Hmm this might be alright!I whistled for a cab and when it came near theLicensplate said fresh and had a dice in the mirrorIf anything I could say that this cab was rareBut I thought now forget it, yo home to bel-airI pulled up to a house about seven or eightAnd I yelled to the cabby yo, home smell you laterLooked at my kingdom I was finally thereTo settle my throne as the prince of bel-air
Oh no you didn't.
The ending is great, but you may want to polish your introduction.
THIRD! lulz
So yeah, lame plot beginning, it could use some fine tuning or more details. But I think the ending is pretty cool, too. It took me a while to come up with it, and it came out really well.