[D] IDBC - POLLY

Posted by Cosine on June 7, 2009, 8:56 p.m.

PLOT!

So, I've come up with a small plot for Polly. Polly is no longer the name of your character, but rather the planet on which this creature lives. Polly was a very nice planet, until IDBC came along. IDBC (Interplanetary Delivery of Boxes Company (The universe's version of UPS)) tried to set up a factory on planet Polly, because of a lack of any major vegetation. Unfortunately, IDBC's company completely ruined Polly, and they left, leaving all of their stuff behind to rot, because Polly's soil easily gave away to their tunnel boring machines to make box delivery pipes (hence the flying boxes :D). This resulted in several holes in the ground. Then, you're moving in with your uncle and your auntie in Bel-Air!

Now this is the story all about how

My life got flipped, turned upside down

And Id like to take a minute just sit right there

Ill tell you how I became the prince of a town called bel-air

In west philadelfia born and raised

On the playground where I spent most of my days

Chilling out, maxing, relaxing all cool

And all shooting some b-ball outside of the school

When a couple of guys said were up in no good

Started making trouble in my neighbourhood

I got in one little fight and my mom got scared

And said youre moving with your aunte and uncle in bel-air

I begged and pleaded with her the other day

But she packed my suitcase and sent me on my way

She gave me a kissin and she gave me my ticket

I put my walkman on and said I might aswell kick it

First class, yo this is bad,

Drinking orange juice out of a champagne glass

Is this what the people of bel-air livin like,

Hmm this might be alright!

I whistled for a cab and when it came near the

Licensplate said fresh and had a dice in the mirror

If anything I could say that this cab was rare

But I thought now forget it, yo home to bel-air

I pulled up to a house about seven or eight

And I yelled to the cabby yo, home smell you later

Looked at my kingdom I was finally there

To settle my throne as the prince of bel-air

Comments

Juju 15 years, 5 months ago

Oh no you didn't.

F1ak3r 15 years, 5 months ago

The ending is great, but you may want to polish your introduction.

Cosine 15 years, 5 months ago

THIRD! lulz

So yeah, lame plot beginning, it could use some fine tuning or more details. But I think the ending is pretty cool, too. It took me a while to come up with it, and it came out really well.