I was curious if anyone was willing to take a quick look at a the script I've started writing for an action/platformer game. It isn't even a full page long yet, so its not too horrid of a read.

Also, if anyone else is interested in a collab or working with me on this title, please feel free to send me a PM! I do quite a bit of writing and dabble a bit in engine programming, but when it comes to actual level design, music, and *shudders* graphical design, I am hindered.

Here's the link to my script thus far: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-q8KeVywXR5C6-cZKEQvRXk5ca3ZMmRLcAsNG7tXDUI/edit?hl=en&authkey=COP8hIkB#

Thanks to anyone who takes a look! Feel free to comment on it below.

EDIT: Particularly, I'm looking for feedback on the writing style and structure of the script. Any other comments are welcome, as well.