I started it.
Part 1, not much of a read, but you guys can't handle more anyway! XDIt's a image, because I like to format.Comments on the story so far would be nice.I think I'm going to cut "foreboding" out, I think it does not fit. 9509 hits as of writing(a bit after)
I like it. A tad bit dark, but its captured my attention so… GIMME MOAR!
I may later.
Very nicely written. Good job. =)
Good job taking a picture of the cursor
And yes, taking out foreboding would be interesting