Revisited

Posted by MahFreenAmeh on April 12, 2007, 8:58 p.m.

Okay, seeing as NO ONE had ANYTHING to say about the songs I wrote, I'm now reposting them.

What you do, is TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK OF THEM. KTHXBAI.

Seriously. I take the time to write these for people to read, and no one has the faintest care, it seems. They read, but do they say anything? I think not.

Human

A man is just a man,

Flesh, bone, and soul,

Doing all that he can,

Paying the ultimate toll,

Sliding along in life,

Not feeling the breeze,

Grasping his knife,

And falling to his knees.

Humanity is imperfection,

This I must confess,

Cut up, section by section,

Full of thoughts and weakness,

Death is the only escape,

And we can’t reach it,

It’s all like a scrape,

Easy to end, as is fit,

Don the mask of imperfection,

Life is but a poison kiss,

We experience limitation,

Flinching at the snake’s hiss,

Dance under the moon,

Night and day, as it may come,

Late is never too soon,

Under the burning sun,

We want to be correct,

We want control,

As we go direct,

Without our soul,

Born of the killed,

And devoid of life,

We’ll never be thrilled,

Without our daily strife…

Rage Dump

We want to control you,

We want your mind,

It’s all insanely true,

We are the unkind.

Fight back, strike back,

We want your antagonism,

We have what you lack,

Start up another schism,

Release your inner mind,

Let it all go,

It’s yet another rare find,

To see one who can do so,

Duck down, dodge the hit,

Can you feel the fists?

Survive as the physically fit,

Or pass on with nameless lists,

Bleed full, bleed true,

Lose your life’s fundament,

We can all see through,

Your false sacrament,

Bite me, fight me,

Rip apart my skin,

Lost in a bloody sea,

It’s an eternal sin,

Hate me, rape me,

Utilize your rage,

Hate me. there’s no fee,

Emotions don’t belong in a cage

Torn apart at the extremities,

Just a bloody stump,

All are just anonynimities,

Locked into an eternal slump,

Shoot me, kill me,

Give into final urge,

I can no longer see,

As I become purge(d)

BALLAD #23

I want, You want,

We all can't attain,

Just a futile hunt,

Behind our disdain.

Shredding away,

Picking at our years,

We're nothing today,

But empty tears,

Can't embrace the fact,

That we are as we are,

Can't make a pact,

To change just how far (it goes),

Gotta stop waiting for death,

Get active now,

Don't waste any time on the method,

Lest you be slaughtered like a simple cow,

Born in a fire,

Killed in a blaze,

No one to admire,

No one to amaze,

Sentenced to monotony,

A conviction of death,

Swimming through the dark sea,

With a shortage of breath,

I want, I need, I should,

You take, you rip, you remove,

Is this how you would have it,

Beating against a single groove?

Strike back at me,

We want, we require, we need,

The sky is dark, and we still see,

That we are the last seed,

Live it up while you can,

Beat back to the melody,

Control comes like a battering ram,

Swift and hard, your life is the fee,

It's a weapon of pure deception,

Of greed, of lust, of hate,

With no welcoming reception,

Holding power over your fate.

Machines of hatred and death,

And abstract concepts of war,

As addictive as crystal meth,

Knocking down the sanctuary door,

Strike back, fight back,

Get to the core,

The knowledge you could never lack,

Control is but an eyesore,

For those who have the power,

And the concept of life,

Born in a bullet shower,

Ended with a knife,

They live for us,

Night and day,

Our protection, our lust,

Revolves on what they say.

I have nothing more,

I have nothing less,

No blood, no gore,

No wound, no dress,

I leave with these words,

I bestow upon thee,

May I be heard, for,

For all humanity…

Anyways. In other news, I've been doing speed drills on my guitar lately. I started at 40 BPM on Saturday, at noon, on quarter notes. The fastest I can play now is 8th notes on 160 BPM. I could play 16th on 100 BPM, as well. I'm trying to shit for 16th on 160. Speed drills are fun, but they fuck with my plucking thumb.

Other news: I got a new battery pack for my Game Boy Advance SP, which means that I can play it now. I also bought Pokémon: Fire Red. Really good game, I recommend it.

And, earlier today, I also bought a Sega Game Gear, and Mortal Kombat. It's teh secks.

~MahFreenAmehOut~

[shiny]

If you intend to get mad at me for posting basically the same blog twice, do the right thing, AND PAY ATTENTION TO IT THE FIRST TIME, DIPSHIT. You have no room to speak if you don't take the time to speak out at first. Unless you're me. I'm awesome like that.

Comments

Kaz 17 years, 7 months ago

Quote:
I take the time to write these for people to read, and no one has the faintest care, it seems.
I once felt that way about game making, I got over it though.

Now I feel that way again, but with a different subject and context.

Sorry, too sad to read songs now, perhaps later.

MahFreenAmeh 17 years, 7 months ago

Yay. Er. Not yay? I ahve no clue.

SHINY STUFFS!

Quietus 17 years, 7 months ago

I like Ballad #23 a lot.

Do you have a DeviantArt account that you post these on?

MahFreenAmeh 17 years, 7 months ago

Yes. Along with all of my art.

http://photoshopphreek.deviantart.com

TwistyWristy 17 years, 7 months ago

Interesting songs, although it seems like you were in a bad mood when you wrote them.

They have a lot of darkness to them. =p

Quote:
As I become purge(d)
Quote:
To change just how far (it goes),
I don't like the bits in parenthesis attempting to keep everything rhyming.

It breaks the flow throwing everything off.

I know how frustrating it is trying to make something fit; I've struggled on numerous occasions myself when writing poetry, but I would recommend trying to find different words that rhyme, or rewriting that particular section to make it work.

Also, some lines didn't flow together such as when a sentence was broken into two lines to 'fit the format' or when a longer sentence with big words was followed by a shorter one.

Other than that, I enjoyed them.

Keep up the good work!

TwistyWristy

MahFreenAmeh 17 years, 7 months ago

Hm.

First off, I'm usually rather depressed or tired when I write music. THat explains a bit.

And the letters/words in parenthesis aren't necessarily said, they're implied while singing. They aren't really said at all. If they are, it's quickly, and stress is put on the rhyming syllable, not on them.

AS per the flow, that's just my style of music. THat's just how I write it. I mean, don't get me wrong, I tried to think of rhyming words. I did for about 10 minutes. I queried every corner of my mind, but coudln't find anything. So, I just went with that.

I took a chance. Haha. In the words of MC Lars:

"I take a chance, I rhyme what with so what?"

And, as an extension to the whole darkness, the air of darkness is supposed to really entice the listener/reader, and make them pay more attention to the imagery in the song. You know. Stuff like that.

TwistyWristy 17 years, 7 months ago

You're very defensive of your work =p.

Quote:
I took a chance.
Nothing wrong with that, everyone has their own unique style.

Looking at it again, I really only minded slightly because I was reading it and it sort of broke the flow. It wouldn't be as bad if someone were singing…

The air of darkness is enticing.

You did very well with that; as I read the song, I could 'see' the song very vividly.

TwistyWristy

MahFreenAmeh 17 years, 7 months ago

Haha. I am very defensive of anything that's mine. I'm apparently weird in that way. I think. Oh well. I like defending my action. Plus, I technically only said "I took a chance," to lead into the quote after it. Haha.

s 17 years, 7 months ago

Lots of lyrics…I'm not much for those,so…

I'm pretty passive.I sometimes get a neural net set on defending something,and I'm stuck on it until the net resorts itself

MahFreenAmeh 17 years, 7 months ago

Sounds fun.