Who wants to write lyrics?

Posted by Mordi on June 6, 2009, 4:50 p.m.

Lyric-writers are apparently unaware of the internet, as I have been looking for one for months. I wonder if there are any hiding here on 64Digits?

Here are two projects that could use some lyrics:

Promises.mp3

and

Tears of my Heart.mp3

Very cliché names that ought to fit well with some cliché lyrics. Both are remixes of old C64/Amiga tunes by a guy who goes by the name "Drax".

Comments

RetroVortex 15 years, 5 months ago

I don't have any experience with music, but I'll give Tears of my Heart. Here's what I got so far:

0-30 secs: no lyrics, into-tune (I know no terminology I apologise)

30 secs - 1:01

Tears of my heart ba-by,

Their flow..in-out,

Like a ri-ver that leads to the sea,

I wish things were different,

but you shut me-out

All the things that I did was to-please

Still workin' on the rest of the song.

I hope its not too cheesy…

Juju 15 years, 5 months ago

Promises has a kinda Parisian feel to it, maybe some lyrics centred around the idea "I promised to wait for you in Paris but you've never come."

RetroVortex 15 years, 5 months ago

1:01 - 1:31

I think back, to the way it was,

we talked, and we talked, and we talked, till,

the morning-sun rose up,

to-the-sky, night-passed-us-by, then-you-broke-my-heart,

When that door-slammed shut,

I cried, and I cried, and I cried,

back then,that pain was locked-up,

deep inside, inside-my-heart.

(if you like it, I'll try to finish it tomorrow, I have to go to bed now…need sleep…)

Quietus 15 years, 5 months ago

Quote:
I hope its not too cheesy…
It is.

Quote:
I wonder if there are any hiding here on 64Digits?
There are.

Mordi 15 years, 5 months ago

RetroVortex: That's not too bad actually. But it doesn't have to follow the main melody to a tee (although it's hard to convey the singing melody when you don't actually hear it). It was *very* cheesy though (I like cheese). :P

Leyenda 15 years, 5 months ago

e duro fazer um carrinho,

quando os homens fracos hesitam.

Os homens fortes sucedem

onde fraco os homens falham.

Sandwich 15 years, 5 months ago

I thought this would be fun, I've wrote lyrics with my band a couple of times, need the practice. Don't take this too seriously, just having a go, because you're music is awesome. So tell me if I should leave the songwriting to the rest of my band…

Promises

(I stole Juju's idea, because after he said it, it's all I could think of listening to it hah)

0:49-1:03

(I see a sort of 'mm-mm la-la deda' skat thing going on)

1:14-

(to accordian or whatever it is)

that night that I cried

that night that you tried

the night the dove died… when the knot un-tied

I gave anything

You took everything

But now you have gone I have nothing to live for anymore-ore

Oo-oo-ooo-oo, Now that the lights have dimmed

And that I see you for the first time

Your promises, at the heart of all,

At the heart of all your lies

I just can't trust you anymore

3:22-

Your promises, at the bridge of everything

At the heart of all your lies, I just won't

Love you anymore

Tears of my heart

(Tears of my heart sounded teenage angsty to me. Being an angsty teenager…)

<Intro>

Stopped up the passage but my blood still pours out

I've never cared this much for you

I asked not to love but to simply remain

but in your presence nothing is true

Tears of my heart shedding hatred of love over you, now

I swim down into the silent of the blue, oh-oh-oh

Just one more willow weeping grief from the depths of my soul, I

Found what I played was no lead role, oh-oh-oh

Of all of those I've met

there's not one I've felt to love yet

my eyes bleed to feel where I am

never believed by anyone to be seen

trapped in the claws of my own senseless dream

again and again, again and again it surely shines through, to-o you, oh

<breakdown?>

Tears of my heart falling tears falling down

Turned red now that all doubt has gone, gone

If you ever dare take all meaning once more

This egg will strike down to the floor

Tears of my heart shedding hatred of love over you, now

I swim down into the silent of the blue, oh-oh-oh

Just one more willow weeping grief from the depths of my soul, I

Found what I played was no lead role, oh-oh-oh

<instrumentalish bit where it goes all quite for a while>

(final bit)

Tears of my heart shedding hatred of love

Into the silent of the blue –oo

~

So LMFAO. That's enough wrist-cutting music for me.

Mordi 15 years, 5 months ago

Sandwich: I really liked your take on Promises. That one had some strokes of genius that really went well with the track, although there is one or two places where I couldn't quite get the singing to fit the tune. On tears of my heart, I had some trouble figuring out where the words went with the melody, though. I do feel that the theme of the lyrics don't quite fit the melody. But that's solid work, especially done so quick!

Polystyrene Man 15 years, 5 months ago

Why can't you write your own lyrics?

Saying "I'm bad at it" is no excuse. It's like anything else- you practice, you get better.

Truth is, no one's going to write more fitting lyrics to your music than yourself.

(This was not meant to sound scolding or anything)

Juju 15 years, 5 months ago

Quote:
I just can't trust you anymore
That fits perfectly.