...Writing Erotica [NSFW]

Posted by Ronnica on May 11, 2010, 10:01 p.m.

NSFW According to Arc.

As very very many of you have forgotten, I started my first month here writing up stories of my superhero self and wrote under suggestive themes. Well, recently I've tried to get back into writing and erotica seemed the way to go. Here's a quick preview of my first story, and please forgive my amateurism.

Okay so, the two characters with no names (yes, a lot of "she" and "he") fell asleep in bed with no funny business and this is the morning after:

"She rolled onto her stomach and rested her chin onto his chest. She could feel her head raise and lower a bit from his breathing, keeping her entertained for a moment before she realized he must have been having an erotic dream. His member between his legs was hard enough; its shape was noticeable on the outside of the sheets. Giggling a bit, she secretly hoped he was dreaming of her.

Early mornings usually brought out the more trouble-making side of hers. Sliding the covers lower on their bodies, she could see his erection more clearly through his boxers. In a daring move, she began to lightly trace her fingers around the bulge. She felt his body next to hers start to stir and she continued. She began to kiss his neck and chest lightly, as not to wake him fully. From tracing her fingers, she began to rub a little with her finger tips, causing him breathe a little harder and open his eyes to her morning mischief. She continued to kiss his neck, but became rougher, kissing hard, sucking and biting it causing him to moan sleepily. She started to bite his shoulder and rub him harder.

He raised his arm from behind her and began to stroke her hair, accepting her kisses all over his face and neck, encouraging her by kissing her back whenever he could. Well aware that he was quite awake and ready for her, she moved her body lower onto his to the point that his hard on was in her face. Pulling his boxers down, she was excited for him to be revealed to her. He watched and became more aroused as she took his hard cock into her hand, and gave it a round of light squeezes. He stroked her hair with one hand, and held his member with the other, masturbating himself to the sight of her between his legs."

As I was told NUMEROUS times in English class in high school, "You have to elevate your vocab." I even notice my poor English in those few paragraphs but I'm not at a level intelligently or skillfully to write with a more elevated vocabulary. God knows I try, but I'm just not meant to =P

HAVE A GREAT DAY !! I LOVE YOU ALL SOOOOOOO MUCH ! unfortunately.

Comments

DSG 14 years, 5 months ago

Furthermore, I prefer getting laid over reading about other people getting laid.

Juju 14 years, 5 months ago

Bear in mind you're a bloke, DSG.

Kaz 14 years, 5 months ago

Quote:
Knowing men, he was probably dreaming about a zombie invasion.
That goes through my mind about 10 times a day now =(

Doesn't help that I'm playing LFD2 a lot lately.

Ronnica 14 years, 5 months ago

Am taking note on your opinions fellas.

Polystyrene Man 14 years, 5 months ago

Quote:
His member between his legs was hard enough
Well…

It's morning -doubtless he has morningwood, by default-

he's sleeping with a girl,

he's never had sex with her,

This guy is far beyond "hard enough," he's probably midway through popping.

Erotica is a fine genre and all, but don't fall into cliches. None of this was particularly exciting or interesting or new… not to be harsh, but that's the way I read it.

Also, the guy and the girl seem to be romantically involved (otherwise I'm sure he wouldn't be sleeping in boxers, not that he should be anyways)… yet he masturbates in her face before having sex with her? Or rubbing her breasts? Or pleasuring her in any way beyond her hair?

Grand-High Gamer 14 years, 5 months ago

Foreplay: For pussies.

Double entendres: For THE WIN.