...Writing Erotica [NSFW]

Posted by Ronnica on May 11, 2010, 10:01 p.m.

NSFW According to Arc.

As very very many of you have forgotten, I started my first month here writing up stories of my superhero self and wrote under suggestive themes. Well, recently I've tried to get back into writing and erotica seemed the way to go. Here's a quick preview of my first story, and please forgive my amateurism.

Okay so, the two characters with no names (yes, a lot of "she" and "he") fell asleep in bed with no funny business and this is the morning after:

"She rolled onto her stomach and rested her chin onto his chest. She could feel her head raise and lower a bit from his breathing, keeping her entertained for a moment before she realized he must have been having an erotic dream. His member between his legs was hard enough; its shape was noticeable on the outside of the sheets. Giggling a bit, she secretly hoped he was dreaming of her.

Early mornings usually brought out the more trouble-making side of hers. Sliding the covers lower on their bodies, she could see his erection more clearly through his boxers. In a daring move, she began to lightly trace her fingers around the bulge. She felt his body next to hers start to stir and she continued. She began to kiss his neck and chest lightly, as not to wake him fully. From tracing her fingers, she began to rub a little with her finger tips, causing him breathe a little harder and open his eyes to her morning mischief. She continued to kiss his neck, but became rougher, kissing hard, sucking and biting it causing him to moan sleepily. She started to bite his shoulder and rub him harder.

He raised his arm from behind her and began to stroke her hair, accepting her kisses all over his face and neck, encouraging her by kissing her back whenever he could. Well aware that he was quite awake and ready for her, she moved her body lower onto his to the point that his hard on was in her face. Pulling his boxers down, she was excited for him to be revealed to her. He watched and became more aroused as she took his hard cock into her hand, and gave it a round of light squeezes. He stroked her hair with one hand, and held his member with the other, masturbating himself to the sight of her between his legs."

As I was told NUMEROUS times in English class in high school, "You have to elevate your vocab." I even notice my poor English in those few paragraphs but I'm not at a level intelligently or skillfully to write with a more elevated vocabulary. God knows I try, but I'm just not meant to =P

HAVE A GREAT DAY !! I LOVE YOU ALL SOOOOOOO MUCH ! unfortunately.

Comments

rufus 14 years, 7 months ago

WHAT NO PICTURES?

Kenon 14 years, 7 months ago

I AGREE

Tasm 14 years, 7 months ago

The pink, the awful fucking pink.

Ronnica 14 years, 7 months ago

@ rufus and Kenon : THEY WOULDN'T LET ME !

@ mike. : If only it could fuck.

Kenon 14 years, 7 months ago

WELL THEN JUST PM ME THEM

Ferret 14 years, 7 months ago

I think the most NSFW thing here is all the pink.

Arcalyth 14 years, 7 months ago

I expected more in the line of NSFW content, which is why I asked her to tag it.. :P

Ronnica 14 years, 7 months ago

@ Kenon : Maybe later =P

Cesque 14 years, 7 months ago

Okaaay, so you're at work, what's the difference between somebody looking over your shoulder and seeing a pink site with a lot of text, and somebody looking over your shoulder and seeing a pink site with a lot of text?

Review time! :3

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She rolled onto her stomach and rested her chin onto his chest.

This sentence made me think it's about dogs.

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His member between his legs

As opposed to his member on his forehead?

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Giggling a bit, she secretly hoped he was dreaming of her.

Knowing men, he was probably dreaming about a zombie invasion.

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she could see his erection more clearly through his boxers.

So he undressed down to boxers before falling asleep, but didn't take THEM off for some reason? I suppose if you're lying with a female you're going to have sex with in the morning, you may just as well take it all off, and if you don't know that you're going to have sex with her, you probably wouldn't take everything but your boxers off.

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She began to kiss his neck and chest lightly, as not to wake him fully. From tracing her fingers, she began to rub a little with her finger tips, causing him breathe a little harder and open his eyes to her morning mischief. She continued to kiss his neck, but became rougher, kissing hard, sucking and biting it causing him to moan sleepily. She started to bite his shoulder and rub him harder.

Okay… you have to elevate your vocab.

Juju 14 years, 7 months ago

Grab a thesaurus.